I can see what you mean, the "I've been seating at the bar for a while now" sentence should probably lose that 'now'. I need to go over this chapter to find out exactly where Severus' mention of the word 'horny' comes into the scene, but you may be onto something there, too. I'll look into making those changes at some point over the weekend, if I find the time.

I'm thrilled that you've enjoyed this chapter and I sincerely hope that you continued to enjoy the rest of this tale. Thanks so much for having taken a moment to send me this lovely and very constructive review. It was greatly appreciated. :)